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The given pie graphs illustrate the proportions of water consuming for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The given pie graphs illustrate the proportions of water consuming for different purposes in six areas of the world. eA63J
The given pie graphs illustrate the proportions of water consuming for different purposes in six areas of the world. Overall, the ratio of water uses for Agricultural is highest except for North America and Europe. By the contrast, these two areas use water for industrial is largest. In particular, in Central Asea, the consumption of water for Agricultural account for 88 percent. The percentage of water for Agricultural in Africa and South East Asia make up from 81% to 84%, respectively. In the contrast, Europe and North America is lowest accounting for around from 30% to 40%. The proportion of water for domestic in Europe account for 15% and this was twice as much as that of South East Asia and Central Asia. However, in South America, this country has the consumption of water for domestic is highest. The rate of water for industrial in North America and Europe is peak at about 50 percent. The percentage of water for this in Africa was 7%, which was 2% higher than that in Central Asia.
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for Agricultural account for 88 percent. The percentage of
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for Agricultural in Africa and South East Asia
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accounting for around from 30% to 40%. The proportion of
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for domestic in Europe account for 15% and this was twice as much as that of South East Asia and Central Asia.
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, in South America, this country has the consumption of
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for domestic is highest. The rate of
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for industrial in North America and Europe is peak at about 50 percent. The percentage of
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for this in Africa was 7%, which was 2% higher than that in Central Asia.
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IELTS academic The given pie graphs illustrate the proportions of water consuming for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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