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The given pie charts show various sources from which energy was produced in France in the years 1995 and 2005.

The given pie charts show various sources from which energy was produced in France in the years 1995 and 2005. j8NNp
The given pie charts show various sources from which energy was produced in France in the years 1995 and 2005. It can be seen that in both years, coal and gas were the first and second most important sources of energy. While coal produced 29. 80% of energy in 1995, the contribution of gas was only marginally low at 29. 63%. In the same year, petrol accounted for 29. 27% of the total energy produced. Nuclear contributed 6. 40% and ‘others’ generated 4. 90% of the total energy. In 2005, coal and gas continued to occupy the first and second position and contributed 30. 93% and 30. 31% respectively of the total energy produced. While petrol remained the third biggest source of energy in this year, its contribution dipped from 29. 27% in 1995 to 19. 35% in 2005. Meanwhile, the amount of energy generated from nuclear and ‘others’ increased to 10. 10% and 9. 10% respectively. Overall, it can be seen that petrol lost some of its relevance as a source of energy over the 10-year period, while other sources like nuclear became more important
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in France in the years 1995 and 2005.

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in 1995, the contribution of gas was
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, petrol accounted for 29. 27% of the total
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. Nuclear contributed 6. 40% and ‘others’ generated 4. 90% of the total energy.

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and second position and contributed 30. 93% and 30. 31%
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. While petrol remained the third biggest
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in this
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, its contribution dipped from 29. 27% in 1995 to 19. 35% in 2005. Meanwhile, the amount of
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generated from nuclear and ‘others’ increased to 10. 10% and 9. 10%
respectively
.

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IELTS academic The given pie charts show various sources from which energy was produced in France in the years 1995 and 2005.

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