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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of graduates who held various degrees in a given country in 1980 and in 2008.

The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of graduates who held various degrees in a given country in 1980 and in 2008. oYRK
The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of graduates who held various degrees in a given country in 1980 and in 2008. Overall, it is interesting to see that undergraduate of the first degree courses Arts and Science lost popularity whereas the masters and Doctoral courses gained popularity after a period of nearly three decades. In 1980, a quarter of the graduates held a first degree in Arts, whereas only 12% went for masters in Arts and very small minority (2%) went for PhD in arts. First degree science graduates were a little under a fifth whereas the masters in science graduates were nearly a third of total. Only 13% held PhD degrees. In 2008, Graduates holding masters in Arts and Science were 11% and 10% respectively. This percentage was considerably less as compared to that of 1980. The proportion of masters in Arts and Science graduates was almost similar to that of 1980. PhD degree holders in Arts grew significantly from 2% to 7% and the PhD in science was held by 30% which was also much higher than the figures of 1980.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of graduates who held various degrees in a given country in 1980 and in 2008.

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