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The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010

The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010 xWgN
The bar plot shows how the fraction of people making donations to charity varies for different age groups in the years 1990 and 2010. The graph shows that the aged people tend to donate more compared to the younger generation at all the time. The fraction of those who are generous to charity is more for the people who are aged over 36. The percentage is always around or above 30% for the people above 36 whereas it is below 30% who are under 36. People aged between 36-50 are formidably generous and the number of people helping charity is more than the remaining age groups, nearly 35% of people have donated in 2010 and over 40% of people have donated in 1990. The fraction of people donated to charity for the age groups 18-25, 26-35, and 36-50 are high in 1990 with respect to 2010. Whereas, for the remaining age groups of 51-65, and those who aged more than 65 the number of people giving donations has increased in 2010.
The bar plot
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how the fraction of
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people
making donations to
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charity
varies for
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different
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age
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groups
in the years 1990 and 2010.

The graph
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shows
that the
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aged
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people
tend to donate more compared to the younger generation at all the time.

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The
fraction of those
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who
are generous to
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charity
is more for the
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people
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who
are
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aged
over 36.
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The
percentage is always around or above 30% for the
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people
above 36 whereas it is below 30%
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who
are under 36.
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People
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aged
between 36-50 are
formidably
generous and the number of
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people
helping
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charity
is more than the remaining
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age
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groups
,
nearly
35% of
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people
have donated in 2010 and over 40% of
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people
have donated in 1990.

The fraction of
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people
donated to
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charity
for the
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age
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groups
18-25, 26-35, and 36-50 are high in 1990 with respect to 2010. Whereas, for the remaining
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age
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groups
of 51-65, and those
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who
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aged
more than 65 the number of
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people
giving donations has increased in 2010.
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010

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