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The given pie charts illustrate the differences in average proportion of expenditure by students, in 2000 and 2010.

The given pie charts illustrate the differences in average proportion of expenditure by students, in 2000 and 2010. GL6NB
The given pie charts illustrate the differences in average proportion of expenditure by students on seven purposes, including food and drink, eating out, utilities, sports and cultural, clothing, transports and holidays, in 2000 and 2010. Overall, there was a slightly change in the ways students spent their funds. It is clear that while food and drink, utilities as well as sports and cultural took a considerable amount of expenditure in both years, eating out made up an insignificant part in 2000, the same with holidays and clothing in 2010. At the beginning of the period, utilities accounted for approximately one-fifth of expenditure then experienced a growth in 2010, by 27%. Eating out made up 4% of the chart in 2000 then doubled in 2010. Moreover, the percentage of transports rose slightly by 1% during the period. By contrast, the amount of money that students spent on clothing witnessed a dramatic drop from 16% to 5% after ten years. Besides, food and drink, sports and cultural as well as holidays remained constant at 29%, 17% and 5%, respectively.
The
given
pie charts illustrate the differences in average proportion of expenditure by students on seven purposes, including food and drink, eating out, utilities, sports and cultural, clothing, transports and holidays, in 2000 and 2010.

Overall
, there was a
slightly
change
in the ways students spent their funds. It is
clear
that while food and drink, utilities
as well
as sports and cultural took a considerable amount of expenditure in both years, eating out made up an insignificant part in 2000, the same with holidays and clothing in 2010.

At the beginning of the period, utilities accounted for approximately one-fifth of expenditure then experienced a growth in 2010, by 27%. Eating out made up 4% of the chart in 2000 then doubled in 2010.
Moreover
, the percentage of transports rose
slightly
by 1% during the period.

By contrast, the amount of money that students spent on clothing witnessed a dramatic drop from 16% to 5% after ten years.
Besides
, food and drink, sports and cultural
as well
as holidays remained constant at 29%, 17% and 5%,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate the differences in average proportion of expenditure by students, in 2000 and 2010.

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