Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The given pie charts compare the average expenditures of households' major categories of two countries Japan and Malaysia in 2010.

The given pie charts compare the average expenditures of households' major categories of two countries Japan and Malaysia in 2010. kYaNM
The given pie charts compare the average expenditures of households' major categories of two countries Japan and Malaysia in 2010. Overall, what stand out from the pie graphs is that both the countries spent almost same amount of average expenditure on housing and food, whereas, the least average expenditure spent on transportation in both the countries. To commence with, in Japan slightly less than one-third of total household expenditure spent on housing. However, an almost a quarter of expenditure spent on food, whereas an identical amount of average household expenditure spent on healthcare and other goods and services which was 20% and 21% respectively in Japan in 2010. In regard to Malaysia, 30% of total household expenditure spent for other goods and services, while only 3% spent on transportation which was the least spending in 2010 in Malaysia. Moreover, around the quarter of total spent on housing and food from household expenditure and 10% spent on healthcare by Malaysian in 2010.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
pie charts compare the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditures
of households' major categories of two countries Japan and Malaysia in 2010.

Overall
, what stand out from the pie graphs is that both the countries
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
almost same amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
on housing and food, whereas, the least
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on transportation in both the countries.

To commence with, in Japan
slightly
less than one-third of total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on housing.
However
, an almost a quarter of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on food, whereas an identical amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on healthcare and other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
and services which was 20% and 21%
respectively
in Japan in 2010.

In regard to Malaysia, 30% of total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
for other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
and services, while
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
3%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on transportation which was the least spending in 2010 in Malaysia.
Moreover
, around the quarter of total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on housing and food from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expenditure
and 10%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on healthcare by Malaysian in 2010.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The given pie charts compare the average expenditures of households' major categories of two countries Japan and Malaysia in 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
161 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6band
    The given line graph tell us about the time young children spend on watching TV and using computer over a span of time
    The given line graph tell us about the time young children spend on watching TV and using computer over a span of time. It can be seen that initially in 2000 TV was most popularly used at 22 hours, On the other hand computer had not yet taken off with usages level being 3 hours a week. it is notic...
  • 6band
    The olympics medal winners of all time in summer and winter has been illustrated as charts
    The bar chart illustrates the countries having gained the most number of medals, containing gold, silver and bronze in Winter Olympics, while the total number of medals achieved in Summer Olympic has been illustrated as a line graph. Whilst Norway has been the most flourishing country in the Winter ...
  • 6band
    The two maps belo show change to Melvin island between 2000 and 2010.
    The maps illustrates the redevelopment Melvin island from 2000 to 2010. Overall, majority of changes were taken place in the Melvin island not more facilities available but in 2010 improve more facilities. To begin with, the north west area in the motel and garages of the island in 2000 but in 2010 ...
  • 6band
    Pie chart description in 150 words
    The pie charts show the amount of revenue and expenditures in 2016 for a children’s charity in the USA. Overall, it can be seen that donated food accounted for the majority of the income, while program services accounted for the most expenditure. Total revenue sources just exceeded outgoings. In de...
  • 6band
    summarize the given informations
    The given graph demonstrate the total number of bananas imported to 4 nations(Japan, France, German and USA) over a period of 8 years between 1996 and 2004. Overall, it is explicitly apparent that for most of the period, the price of bananas was very high in Japan, while the least the price was in ...
  • 5.5band
    The maps below show the center of a small town called slip from 2010 to 2015.
    The provided set of charts illustrate the changes that took place in the center of a small town named IsIip between 2010 and 2015. Overall, it is apparent from the maps that the area has witnessed several development over the five year period. The area was completely transformed with the addition o...





Get more results for topic:
  • The given pie charts compare the average expenditures of households' major categories of two countries Japan and Malaysia in 2010.