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The two maps belo show change to Melvin island between 2000 and 2010.

The two maps belo show change to Melvin island between 2000 and 2010. E38BD
The maps illustrates the redevelopment Melvin island from 2000 to 2010. Overall, majority of changes were taken place in the Melvin island not more facilities available but in 2010 improve more facilities. To begin with, the north west area in the motel and garages of the island in 2000 but in 2010 were replaced to the hotel and chalets. Similarly, the village land was not changed in both year. ln 2000, the south area tearoom was constructed to replace the sea food restaurant in 2010. In 2000 the marina facilities was not available but in 2010 this facilities was added.
The maps
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illustrates
the redevelopment Melvin island from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
,
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majority of
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changes
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place in the Melvin island not more facilities available
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but
in 2010
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improve
more facilities. To
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begin
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north west
area in the motel and garages of the island in 2000
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but
in 2010
were replaced
to the hotel and chalets.
Similarly
, the village land was not
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changed
in both year.
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ln
2000, the south area tearoom
was constructed
to replace the sea food restaurant in 2010. In 2000 the marina facilities was not available
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but
in 2010
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facilities was
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added
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IELTS academic The two maps belo show change to Melvin island between 2000 and 2010.

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