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The given maps show how fishing village has turned into a modern resort over 30 years.

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The given maps show how fishing village has turned into a modern resort over 30 years. In 2004, the population of resort extended to 80, 000 people. Additionally, hotels are able to offer up to 50, 000 tourists beds. During this period golf course was built in place of woodland. Moreover, right next to golf course hotels for guests were built. Beside the golf course farmland, which supply tourist with the vegetables and fruits, replaced olives field. The village, nearest to woodland, developed and shops for guests were established there. Harbour was demolished and instead, along the shore the beach area was created. Homes of local population now resides right beside the fishing village now called as original village. For tourists, the road leading to the resort was built and the road passes directly through the mountains. In conclusion, significant changes performed to create resting area for tourists was established. All major improvements, necessary for humans and their rest were also carried out. Very huge work was done to achieve this goal and now, thousands of tourists could have a good time there.
The
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show
how fishing village has turned into a modern resort over 30 years.

In 2004, the population of resort extended to 80, 000
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people
.
Additionally
, hotels are able to offer up to 50, 000
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tourists
beds.

During this period golf course
was built
in place of woodland.
Moreover
, right
next
to golf course hotels for guests
were built
. Beside the golf course farmland, which supply
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
with the vegetables and fruits, replaced olives field. The village, nearest to woodland, developed and shops for guests
were established
there.
Possible spelling mistake. 'Harbour' is British English.
Harbour
was demolished
and
instead
, along the shore the beach area
was created
. Homes of local population
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now
resides right beside the fishing village
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now
called as original village.

For
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tourists
, the road leading to the resort
was built
and the road passes
directly
through the mountains.

In conclusion
, significant
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changes
performed to create resting area for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
was established
. All major improvements, necessary for humans and their rest were
also
carried out.
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Very
huge work
was done
to achieve this goal and
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now
, thousands of
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tourists
could have a
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good
time there.
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IELTS academic The given maps show how fishing village has turned into a modern resort over 30 years.

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6.0
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