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Beverage preferences of high school students in China

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The pie chart above illustrates some beverages that high school students in China prefer. In general, they prefer soda the most as it makes up 30% of the whole chart. Then, fruit juice is the second most popular drink which represents 26% of teenagers' preferences. And mineral water is the third most favored drink as it represents 24% of the total chart. Whereas, coffee and tea are lots less favored with high school students in China. Coffee provides approximately 9% of teenagers' preferences and tea is just below 7%. Lastly, the least popular beverage with high school students in China is actually milk which is accounts for the smallest proportion of the beverage - 4%.

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