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The bar chart below shows water levels in resevoir in six cities in Australia in 10/2009 and 10/2010.

The bar chart below shows water levels in resevoir in six cities in Australia in 10/2009 and 10/2010. 26dQw
Water level in reservoir in six Australia's countries was shown by the bar chart from october 2009 to 2010. Overall, the water level in pool of Perth and Sydney were similar in 2009 but the figure of Perth decreased in 2010 while the level in reservoir in Canberra, Melbourne, Darwin and Brisbane climbed up after a year from 2009. In 2009 the level of water in reservoir in Perth and sydney were 50% and in 2010 the percentage of reservoir's water in Perth was decreased to below 40% while Sydney remained stable. The water level in reservoir in others were increased about 10 to 20% in 2009 to 2010. The proportion of water in reservoir of Brisbane was 70% in 2009 and in 2010 the proportion increased rapidly to 90%. Canberra had the lowest proportion of water in reservoir in 2009 which was 30%, 2010 saw a growth in the water level in reservoir in Canbera to 40%(higher than the figure of Perth in the same year).
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in six Australia's countries
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, the
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in pool of Perth and Sydney were similar in 2009
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the figure of Perth decreased in 2010 while the
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in Canberra, Melbourne, Darwin and Brisbane climbed up after a year from 2009. In 2009 the
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were 50% and in 2010 the percentage of reservoir's
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in Perth
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to below 40% while Sydney remained stable. The
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in others
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about 10 to 20% in 2009 to 2010. The proportion of
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of Brisbane was 70% in 2009 and in 2010 the proportion increased
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to 90%. Canberra had the lowest proportion of
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in 2009 which was 30%, 2010
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to 40%(higher than the figure of Perth in the same year).
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows water levels in resevoir in six cities in Australia in 10/2009 and 10/2010.

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