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The given line graph show that three sector education health care and pensions on the basic of share in budget of countries in past and future years

The given line graph show that three sector education health care and pensions on the basic of share in budget of countries in past and future years m18Dr
The provided triple line graph represents a comparison among three sector education health care and pensions on the basis of share in budget of a nation. the survey shows information about past and also makes prediction about future (2051). The data has been calibrated in terms of percentage of total amount. Overall, till now, the share of allthe three filds was hardly changed but it likely that medical care will follow a downward trend while pension will an upward trend one though education is not likely to so much variation. Now, turning towards the details of past (from 2001 to 2019) education topped the chart with around 15% of total amount while pension lagged behind with only 6% of total each decades. the percentage allocated for medical moved slightly upward from 11% to 19% in that period. However, currently, though no change is recorded in case of pension stil at six percent of total yet the share of education has farbn down to thirteen percent. While as per future speculation, the sahre of budget to be allocated for education will be constant of 14% of total till 2051. But a sharp increment will be seen from six percent to eighteen percent in case of pension and it will grab the top share. In contrast, a sudden fall is being predicated as for as medical care is considered. it will decilne by 8% over the time period of three decades in future. So a significant variation has been recorded.
The provided triple line graph represents a comparison among three sector
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health care and
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on the basis of
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share
in budget of a nation.
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the
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shows
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makes
prediction about future (2051). The data has
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in terms of percentage of
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total
amount.

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, till
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three
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was hardly
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changed
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it likely that medical care will follow a downward trend while
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pension
will an upward trend one though
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education
is not likely to
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so
much variation.

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Now
, turning towards the
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details
of past (from 2001 to 2019)
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education
topped the chart with around 15% of
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total
amount while
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pension
lagged behind with
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only
6% of
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total
each
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.
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the
percentage allocated for medical
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moved
slightly
upward from 11% to 19% in that period.

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,
currently
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change
is recorded
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pension stil
at six percent of
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yet
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education
has
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farbn
down to thirteen percent.

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of budget to
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for
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education
will be constant of 14% of
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till 2051.
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a sharp increment will be
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seen
from six percent to eighteen percent in case of
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pension
and it will grab the top
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share
.
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, a sudden fall is
being predicated
as for as medical care
is considered
.
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by 8% over the time period of three decades
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a significant variation has
been recorded
.
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IELTS academic The given line graph show that three sector education health care and pensions on the basic of share in budget of countries in past and future years

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