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The given line graph illustrates the information about percentages of the tourists who went to Scotland and visited four variety of attractions between 1980 and 2010.

The given line graph illustrates the information about percentages of the tourists who went to Scotland and visited four variety of attractions between 1980 and 2010. bDA2l
The given line graph illustrates the information about percentages of the tourists who went to Scotland and visited four variety of attractions between 1980 and 2010. Overall, tourists who visited the Festival and the Zoo decreased gradually from beginning to the end of the period. However, Visitors to the Aquarium and the Castle climbed more percentages than in the beginning. All of them had fluctuations throughout the years. Beginning to introduce with two upward trends, it is visible that the Zoo had 10% of visitors in 1980 and surged to a mere 15% in the next 5 years. It had fluctuation between 1990 and 2010. It reached to 20% at the end and this fifth was the highest point. Castle had a marginal rocket between 1980 and 1995. It hit its highest point in 1995 and it was nearly a half of sightseers. There was a dramatic dip in 2000 and this percent almost remained stable in the next 3 years with a negligible sink. Taking a closer look at downward patterns, a number of people who went to Festival dropped slightly in the beginning 4 years, reaching about a quarter and this percent reached plateau in the next 4 years. Percentages of visitors in the field of Aquarium had a remarkable soar 1985 and slipped back to 20% in 1990 as in the beginning of period. Over the next 2 years it had a stable percent and it plummeted to just around 8% in 2010.
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line graph illustrates the information about percentages of the tourists who went to Scotland and visited four variety of attractions between 1980 and 2010.

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, tourists who visited the Festival and the Zoo decreased
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from
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beginning
to the
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of the period.
However
, Visitors to the Aquarium and the Castle climbed more percentages than in the
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beginning
. All of them had fluctuations throughout the years.

Beginning to introduce with two upward trends, it is visible that the Zoo had 10% of visitors in 1980 and surged to a mere 15% in the
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5 years. It had fluctuation between 1990 and 2010. It reached to 20% at the
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end
and this fifth was the highest point. Castle had a marginal rocket between 1980 and 1995. It hit its highest point in 1995 and it was
nearly
a half of sightseers. There was a dramatic dip in 2000 and this percent almost remained stable in the
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next
3 years with a negligible sink.

Taking a closer look at downward patterns, a number of
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people
who went to Festival dropped
slightly
in the
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beginning
4 years, reaching about a quarter and this percent reached plateau in the
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next
4 years. Percentages of visitors in the field of Aquarium had a remarkable soar 1985 and slipped back to 20% in 1990 as in the
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beginning
of period. Over the
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2 years it had a stable percent and it plummeted to
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around 8% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the information about percentages of the tourists who went to Scotland and visited four variety of attractions between 1980 and 2010.

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