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The given line graph illustrates the figure of Australian teenagers consuming fast food from 1975 to 2000.

The given line graph illustrates the figure of Australian teenagers consuming fast food from 1975 to 2000. gxV37
The given line graph illustrates the figure of Australian teenagers consuming fast food from 1975 to 2000. it is measured by Kilograms Overall, it can be easily seen that there are considerable upward trends in consumption of fast food between Hamburgers and Pizza. Otherwise, although Fish and Chips was consumed by people the most. However, it experienced a substantial fall. In 1975, the number of hamburgers and pizza registered roughly 10 kilograms and about 5 kilograms respectively. In terms of hamburgers, the figure increased sharply to over 85 kilograms, which after it rose gradually to accurately 100 kilograms in the next 10 years. In the end of the period, the number climbed slightly to over 100 kilograms. According to Pizza, the figure of consumption went up moderately to under 20 kilograms, at which point it reached a peak of over 80 kilograms in two decades and after that, the number remained stable in the last period. As for Fish and Chips, the figure accounted for exactly 100 kilograms. Nonetheless, the number declined gradually to approximately 83 kilograms in 1980, which after it grew remarkably over 90 kilograms in the next five years. During 1985 and 2000, the figure witnessed a dramatic fall to under 40 kilograms.
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line graph illustrates the
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of Australian
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teenagers
consuming
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fast
food from 1975 to 2000.
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it
is measured
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Kilograms


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easily
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seen
that there are considerable upward trends in consumption of
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fast
food between Hamburgers and Pizza.
Otherwise
, although Fish and Chips
was consumed
by
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people
the most.
However
, it experienced a substantial fall.

In 1975, the
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number
of hamburgers and pizza registered roughly 10 kilograms and about 5 kilograms
respectively
. In terms of hamburgers, the
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figure
increased
sharply
to
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over
85 kilograms, which after it rose
gradually
to
accurately
100 kilograms in the
next
10 years.
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In
the
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end
of the period, the
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number
climbed
slightly
to
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over
100 kilograms. According to Pizza, the
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figure
of consumption went up
moderately
to under 20 kilograms, at which point it reached a peak of
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over
80 kilograms in two decades and after that, the
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number
remained stable in the last period.

As for Fish and Chips, the
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figure
accounted for exactly 100 kilograms. Nonetheless, the
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number
declined
gradually
to approximately 83 kilograms in 1980, which after it grew
remarkably
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over
90 kilograms in the
next
five years. During 1985 and 2000, the
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figure
witnessed a dramatic fall to under 40 kilograms.
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IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the figure of Australian teenagers consuming fast food from 1975 to 2000.

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