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The given line graph illustrate the data how birth and death rate fluctuated in 1901 to 2021 , and also gives prediction till 2021.

The given line graph illustrate the data how birth and death rate fluctuated in 1901 to 2021, and also gives prediction till 2021. 2KLpx
Overall, the two lines shows information about birth rate and deaths in newzeland. From 1901 to with the prediction of 2101. In 1901, the death rate in newzeland was 10000, which is gradually increased up to 30000 till 2001. After 2001, the death rate is predicted to be dramatically increase, and goes up to 600000, by the year of 2061. After 2061 it is projected to be slightly decrease, with slight increase it will again decrease. The birth rate was increasd, form 20 to 30 thausound, From 1901 to 1921. After 1939 the birth rate is significantly increased with two slight deepa and goes up to highest number (70 thausound ). After 1961 with again two deepa it increased and steadily decreased and predicted to gradual decrease till 2101
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, the two lines
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information about birth
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rate
and deaths in
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newzeland
. From 1901 to with the prediction of 2101.

In 1901, the death
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rate
in
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newzeland
was 10000, which is
gradually
increased up to 30000 till 2001.

After 2001, the death
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rate
is predicted
to be
dramatically
increase, and goes up to 600000, by the year of 2061. After 2061 it
is projected
to be
slightly
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decrease
, with slight increase it will again decrease.

The birth
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rate
was
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increasd
, form 20 to 30
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thausound
,

From 1901 to 1921. After 1939 the birth
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rate
is
significantly
increased with two slight
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deepa
and goes up to
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highest
number (70
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thausound
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)
.

After 1961 with again two
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deepa
it increased and
steadily
decreased and predicted to gradual decrease till 2101

IELTS academic The given line graph illustrate the data how birth and death rate fluctuated in 1901 to 2021, and also gives prediction till 2021.

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