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Describe the graph below which show Inland Energy Consumption in million tonnes of oil/coal equivalents from 1992 to 1995

Describe the graph below which show Inland Energy Consumption in million tonnes of oil/coal equivalents from 1992 to 1995 xaWKo
The line graph demonstrates Inland Consumption of four different kinds of energy from 1992 to 1995. Overall, the general trend for energy consumption is upward over the period shown, except for coal. As is presented in the line graph, the amount of petroleum was the highest to nearly 80 million tonnes while the lowest – nuclear and hydro-electricity had approximately 20 million tonnes in 1992. In the first year, coal rose upward before witnessed a straight drop; in contrast, natural gas increased gradually. In the following year, insignificantly more energy was burned inland, apart from coal which continual slightly declined. Looking into details, more petroleum than natural gas was used, and there are equal at the end of 1994 to above 75 million tonnes while coal and nuclear and hydro-electricity still maintain. Besides, it is interesting to note that the amount of natural gas used as the dominant energy and more than petroleum at the beginning of 1995, conversely petroleum had a small rise and equivalent with natural gas. In addition, fewer nuclear and hydro-electricity than coal was used to above 50 and 20 million tonnes respectively, which recorded the lowest energy consumption in 1995. To conclude, petroleum and natural gas were mostly consumed to get energy in 1995 whereas in the second and third most consumed energy sources were coal and nuclear and hydro-electricity respectively.
The line graph demonstrates Inland Consumption of four
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different
kinds of
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energy
from 1992 to 1995.
Overall
, the general trend for
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energy
consumption is upward over the period shown,
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except for
coal.

As
is presented
in the line graph, the amount of
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petroleum
was the highest to
nearly
80
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million
tonnes while the lowest
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–
nuclear and hydro-electricity had approximately 20
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million
tonnes in 1992. In the
first
year, coal rose upward
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before
witnessed a straight drop;
in contrast
,
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natural
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gas
increased
gradually
. In the following year,
insignificantly
more
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energy
was burned
inland, apart from coal which continual
slightly
declined. Looking into
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details
, more
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petroleum
than
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natural
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gas
was
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used
, and there are equal at the
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end
of 1994 to above 75
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million
tonnes while coal and nuclear and hydro-electricity
still
maintain.
Besides
, it is interesting to note that the amount of
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natural
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gas
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used
as the dominant
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energy
and more than
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petroleum
at the beginning of 1995,
conversely
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petroleum
had a
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small
rise and equivalent with
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natural
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gas
.
In addition
, fewer nuclear and hydro-electricity than coal was
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used
to above 50 and 20
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million
tonnes
respectively
, which recorded the lowest
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energy
consumption in 1995.

To conclude
,
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petroleum
and
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natural
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gas
were
mostly
consumed to
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get
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energy
in 1995 whereas in the second and third most consumed
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energy
sources were coal and nuclear and hydro-electricity
respectively
.
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IELTS academic Describe the graph below which show Inland Energy Consumption in million tonnes of oil/coal equivalents from 1992 to 1995

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