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The given line graph depicts the proportion of Australian teenagers who consumed fast food in Pizza, Fish and Chips, and Hamburgers annually from 1975 to 2000.

The given line graph depicts the proportion of Australian teenagers who consumed fast food in Pizza, Fish and Chips, and Hamburgers annually from 1975 to 2000. kb1V2
The given line graph depicts the proportion of Australian teenagers who consumed fast food in Pizza, Fish and Chips, and Hamburgers annually from 1975 to 2000. Overall, it can be easily seen that there are considerable upward trends in the consumption of Pizza and hamburgers. Otherwise, although Fish and Chips considered the highest figure in 1975, it experienced a substantial downward trend at the end of the period. To begin with, Hamburgers registered approximately 10 times in the first period, in which the number increased sharply to 60times in the next 5 years. in 1985, the consumed percentage of Hambergurs reached a peak of over 85 times, after that, it climbed significantly to exactly 100 percent in 1995, and remained stable the figure until 2000. According to Pizza, in 1975, the number accounted for below 10%, at which point it rose remarkably to about 30 times in a decade. In the next 10 years, the figure of the consumption of Hamburgers soared to a decent number, which was over 80 times in 1995, which after this figure remained unchanged at the end of the period. In contrast, the number of times eaten Fish and Chips was accurately 100 times in the first year. In 1985, After it underwent a fluctuated number of consumed fast food, which was under 100 times, it continued an enormous fall in the time consumption, which was approximately 50 times in the next 15 years. At the end of the period, the number declined moderately to 38 times.
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line graph depicts the proportion of Australian
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teenagers
who consumed
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fast
food in Pizza, Fish and Chips, and Hamburgers
annually
from 1975 to 2000.

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easily
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seen
that there are considerable upward trends in the consumption of Pizza and hamburgers.
Otherwise
, although Fish and Chips considered the highest
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figure
in 1975, it experienced a substantial downward trend at the
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end
of the period.

To
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begin
with, Hamburgers registered approximately 10
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times
in the
first
period, in which the
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number
increased
sharply
to
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60times
in the
next
5 years.
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in
1985, the consumed percentage of
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Hambergurs
reached a peak of over 85
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times
, after that, it climbed
significantly
to exactly 100 percent in 1995, and remained stable the
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figure
until 2000. According to Pizza, in 1975, the
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number
accounted for below 10%, at which point it rose
remarkably
to about 30
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times
in a decade. In the
next
10 years, the
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figure
of the consumption of Hamburgers soared to a decent
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number
, which was over 80
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times
in 1995, which after this
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figure
remained unchanged at the
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end
of the period.

In contrast
, the
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number
of
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times
eaten Fish and Chips was
accurately
100
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times
in the
first
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year
.
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In
1985, After it underwent a fluctuated
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of consumed
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fast
food, which was under 100
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times
, it continued an enormous fall in the
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time
consumption, which was approximately 50
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times
in the
next
15 years. At the
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end
of the period, the
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number
declined
moderately
to 38
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.

IELTS academic The given line graph depicts the proportion of Australian teenagers who consumed fast food in Pizza, Fish and Chips, and Hamburgers annually from 1975 to 2000.

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