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The given line graph demonstrates the figure for unemployment rate and the number of people migrated from Ireland throughout twenty years from 1988.

The given line graph demonstrates the figure for unemployment rate and the number of people migrated from Ireland throughout twenty years from 1988. NVYgd
The given line graph demonstrates the figure for unemployment rate and the number of people migrated from Ireland throughout twenty years from 1988. Overall, it is easy to see from the chart that there was a decreasing trend in the figure for unemployment rate, whereas people leaving Ireland had a reverse during the year. In particular, the highest point was seen in people leaving Ireland in 1988. Looking at the chart in more detail, in the unemployment rate, which was about 17% in 1988. Then, Ireland had a decrease to around 13% in 1990 before having an upward to 15% in 1992. In the next sixteen years to 2008, the rate decreased steadily and then increased to 6% in 2008. Turning into the remaining dataset, the number of Irish migrants was around 65000 in 1988. Then in 1992, the number of migrants was far lower than that of Irish migrants in 1998 with approximately 35000 people. Finally, it continuously decreased and increased sharply to 50000 people in 2008.
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rate
and the number of
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migrated from Ireland throughout twenty years from 1988.

Overall
, it is easy to
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see
from the chart that there was a decreasing trend in the figure for unemployment
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rate
, whereas
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people
leaving Ireland had a reverse during the year.
In particular
, the highest point was
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seen
in
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people
leaving Ireland in 1988.

Looking at the chart in more detail, in the unemployment
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rate
, which was about 17% in 1988. Then, Ireland had a decrease to around 13% in 1990
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before
having an upward to 15% in 1992. In the
next
sixteen years to 2008, the
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rate
decreased
steadily
and then increased to 6% in 2008.

Turning into the remaining dataset, the number of Irish migrants was around 65000 in 1988. Then in 1992, the number of migrants was far lower than that of Irish migrants in 1998 with approximately 35000
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people
.
Finally
, it
continuously
decreased and increased
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to 50000
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people
in 2008.
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IELTS academic The given line graph demonstrates the figure for unemployment rate and the number of people migrated from Ireland throughout twenty years from 1988.

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