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The given line chart makes a comparison of metropolises development in South Korea and Indonesian from 1969 to 2009 From an overall perspective, it is evident that both countries witnessed an upward trend within the period of 40 years A quick glance at the graph, in 1969 the urbanization proportion in South Korea accounted for nearly 30%.

The given line chart makes a comparison of metropolises development in South Korea and Indonesian from 1969 to 2009 From an overall perspective, it is evident that both countries witnessed an upward trend within the period of 40 years A quick glance at the graph, in 1969 the urbanization proportion in South Korea accounted for nearly 30%. The figure for Indonesia was much lower, stood at 19%. Between 1969 and 2009, it is noticeable that Indonesia's urbanization rate raised significantly to more than 2 times higher, reaching 50%. With regard to South Korea, the rate also increased dramatically, hitting the highest point of 83% in 1999. For the next decade, there were no distinct changes as the proportion still remained stable toward 2009.

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 a comparison of metropolises development in South Korea and Indonesian from 1969 to 2009

From an overall
 perspective, it is evident that both countries witnessed an upward trend within the period of 40 years

A quick glance at the graph, in 1969 the urbanization proportion in South Korea accounted for nearly
 30%. The figure for Indonesia was much lower, stood at 19%. Between 1969 and 2009, it is noticeable that Indonesia's urbanization rate raised significantly
 to more than 2 times higher, reaching 50%. With regard to South Korea, the rate also
 increased dramatically
, hitting the highest point of 83% in 1999. For the next
 decade, there were no distinct This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
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 as the proportion still
 remained stable toward 2009. 

IELTS academic The given line chart makes a comparison of metropolises development in South Korea and Indonesian from 1969 to 2009 From an overall perspective, it is evident that both countries witnessed an upward trend within the period of 40 years A quick glance at the graph, in 1969 the urbanization proportion in South Korea accounted for nearly 30%.

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