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The given illustration depicts the data of figures related to the monthly participation of Shanghai Library in 2010.

The given illustration depicts the data of figures related to the monthly participation of Shanghai Library in 2010. PkX7p

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that the number of participants of the library has increasing manner with some interruptions. As can be reflected from the chart, in January the number of attendance showed the average rate with index of 35, 000 and then dropped to almost 26, 000 for the next month the lowest value. Oppositely, in March the figures of participants jumped to shy of 40, 000 and modestly climbed to nearly 45, 000 in July. In the following month, the value of attendees slid to about 36, 000 as an average number. Although, the numbers of members declined in August, it commenced to gradually climb to 45, 000 at the final point in November as the top one and then the slight fall can be seen in December

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