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The given graph shows the transport by New Zealand, by tourists in different countries in 2004.

The given graph shows the transport by New Zealand, by tourists in different countries in 2004. YBenQ
The given bar graph depicts the percentage of tourists from British, German, Japanese, Korean and Australian, which used different mode of transport, such as air, coach, car, ferry during 2004. Overall, Japanese give more preference to travel by air, whereas other countries used car for travelling. It is clearly seen that there was the maximum proportion of tourists who prefered to use car for migrating in British. The ratio of those people who liked to travel through coach was approximately same in British and German. There was the gap of 10% tourists who used air transport system as well as German mostly preferred to go through ferry. Japanese was opposite from other countries and had highest ratio of air transport system and lowest percentile of tourists travelled through ferry. Moving further, Korean and Australian tourists gave more preference to move by car and the percentile of tourists from Korean was much more than Australian. There was a gap of nearly 19% tourists from Korean and Australian which used air transport system. 15% of Australian used ferry to migrate.
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tourists
from British, German, Japanese, Korean and Australian, which
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used
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different
mode of
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transport
, such as
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air
, coach,
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, ferry during 2004.

Overall
, Japanese give more preference to travel by
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air
, whereas other countries
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used
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car
for travelling.

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clearly
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that there was the maximum proportion of
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tourists
who
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prefered
to
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use
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car
for migrating in British. The ratio of those
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people
who liked to travel through coach was approximately same in British and German. There was the gap of 10%
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tourists
who
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used
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air
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transport
system
as well
as German
mostly
preferred to go through ferry. Japanese was opposite from other countries and had
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highest
ratio of
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air
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system and lowest percentile of
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tourists
travelled through ferry.

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further
, Korean and Australian
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tourists
gave more preference to
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by
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car
and the percentile of
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tourists
from Korean was much more than Australian. There was a gap of
nearly
19%
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tourists
from Korean and Australian which
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used
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air
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transport
system. 15% of Australian
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used
ferry to migrate.

IELTS academic The given graph shows the transport by New Zealand, by tourists in different countries in 2004.

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