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The given graph illustrates the different kinds of free-time activities and these were done by the elderly peoples from 1980 to the present in the United States.

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The given graph illustrates the different kinds of free-time activities and these were done by the elderly peoples from 1980 to the present in the United States. Overall, it was clear that watching TV was the most made free-time activity by peoples in the United States in early 1980. In 2000, it was not as popular as in the early decade. However, the percentage of manufacture by elderly peoples was a little bit increase, from 60% in 1980 to 65% in the present. For hiking, it was only 20% done by peoples in the start of 1980 but surprisingly it was gradually advance to 80% and reach the peach in 2000. Meanwhile, leisure activities like reading and surfing the internet totally progressed from the ratios of 30% to 60% and 5 % to 50 % by the early peoples in the United States during the given period. In contrast, the theatre free-time activity performs by the peoples in the United States has a percentage of 50% in the older decade but becoming to the modern decade, the percentage of theatre by elderly peoples was a little bit decline to 45%. In short, in the early century watching TV was the most popular and acted activity by peoples in the United States. Nonetheless, when the modern century arrived hiking became the most likely activity among the other free-time activities and watching TV still remained the second most spent free-time activity

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