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The given diagrams illustrate the Grange Park in 1920, when it was first into use and now.

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The given diagrams illustrate the Grange Park in 1920, when it was first into use and now. The park went through many fundamental changes, with the most remarkable as the replacement of the water fountain and stage for musician, following by the addition of the water feature and rose garden. One of the most notable differences is the demolish of the water fountain in the center of the Grange Park, making way for the rose garden, along with the chairs, one for each side of the garden. Moving onto the northest corner of the map, the pond made for hydrophytes has been made into the children’s play area. Looking to the right of the former pond, was the rose garden, that is now the café, which conviniently, is to the right of the entrance that is open to the Arnold Avenue. Additionally, opposite of the this entrance is another gate openning to Eldon Street, and a third entrance that has only been constructed now, is to the right of the water pond, only to be accessable from the underground carpark. Furthermore, the new water facillity next to the third gate, was once a glasshouse and seats. The left side of the map also experienced extensive renovations, as one of the major changes is the introduction of an amphitheater for shows, taking up the space of once a stage for musicians. On the west of the theater, a rose garden has been built on the opposite side of the old rose garden, along with the addition of two chairs each for both gardens, one to the left and one to the right of the garden. Finally, the entrances on the north and the south of the plan, together with the rosegarden on the northwest of the diagram stays the same.
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diagrams illustrate the Grange Park in 1920, when it was
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The park went through
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fundamental
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changes
, with the most remarkable as the replacement of the
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fountain and stage for musician, following by the addition of the
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feature and
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rose
garden.

One of the most notable differences is
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the demolish
of the
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fountain in the center of the Grange Park, making way for the
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rose
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garden
, along with the chairs, one for each side of the
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garden
. Moving onto the
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corner of the map, the pond made for
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hydrophytes
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into the children’s play area. Looking to the
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of the former pond, was the
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rose
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,
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the café, which
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openning
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pond,
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facillity
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changes
is the introduction of an amphitheater for
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shows
, taking up the space of once a stage for musicians. On the west of the theater, a
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rose
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garden
has
been built
on the opposite side of the
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rose
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garden
, along with the addition of two chairs each for both
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gardens
, one to the
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of the garden.

Finally
, the
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on the north and the south of the plan, together with the
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on the northwest of the diagram stays the same.
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IELTS academic The given diagrams illustrate the Grange Park in 1920, when it was first into use and now.

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