Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The given diagrams illustrate

The given diagrams illustrate Gl1BL
The given diagrams illustrate the growing process of a big fish species, called as salmon. The growing process of salmon contain of four main cycles with each cycle occure in different areas. Salmon has a long age and growing into large size. In general, by far salmon has four life process starting by salmon eggs then grow bigger into fry salmon. At the third process, fry salmon grow in different area and called as smolt salmon. Then, finally rise as adult salmon. The life process is recurrent when adult salmon spawn the salmon eggs. Egg salmons live in a river which has slow moving of upper. Located between the stones under the reeds, they stand in there for approximately 5-6 months. After growing up into a new shape of body they called as fry salmon. Fry salmon move in a river which has different high and flow faster. They live in this area for four years with 3-8 cm long size. Moreover, the fry salmon grow into smolt salmon which has size longer than before, that is 12-15 cm. After that, the smolt salmon moving again in an open ocean for five years and growing up to adult salmon. The size of adult salmon is the longest one, that is 70-76 cm. The life cycle of salmon is not stop at this step, but repeat when the adult salmon spawn the salmon eggs. Task 2 There are a number of museums that require people who visit the museum to pay the entry fee. While the other museums are discharge of it. In my opinion, charge for admission fee to visitor has a greater impact to the management, though it also has disanvantages behind it. The museum’s visitor absolutely will be happy if they are not pay the admission fee, but this money will help the museum’s management to maintain the historical object inside the museum. For an instance is Lawang Sewu museum in Central Java, Semarang. Located in the city center, Lawang Sewu is a famous destination for traveller from various city of Indonesia. This museum is worth to visit because of the historical object they have. In a Dutch Collonialism, this museum is a train station with a valuable object. To protect and maintain the museum’s environment, the management charge 10. 000 for each visitor. As a result, the historical object has a good quality even they come from the past and visitor can learn a lot from it. In addition, the better quality and various historical object will attract the visitor to come. On the other hand, if the museums give free pass for visitor it will support people to study about past history in the related area without pay anything. For an example, the student in a school can go around the museum to learn from historical object in the museum. They can compare the theory they learn in school and the fact in museum.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
diagrams illustrate the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
of a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
fish species, called as salmon. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
of salmon contain of four main cycles with each cycle
Possible spelling mistake found.
occure
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
. Salmon has a long age and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growing
into large size.

In general
, by far salmon has four life
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
starting by salmon eggs then grow bigger into fry salmon. At the third
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
, fry salmon grow in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
and called as
Possible spelling mistake found.
smolt
salmon. Then,
finally
rise as adult salmon. The life
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
is recurrent when adult salmon spawn the salmon eggs.

Egg salmons
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a river which has slow moving of upper. Located between the stones under the reeds, they stand in there for approximately 5-6 months.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growing
up into a new shape of body they called as fry salmon. Fry salmon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
in a river which has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
high and flow faster. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
for four years with 3-8 cm long size.

Moreover
, the fry salmon grow into
Possible spelling mistake found.
smolt
salmon which has size longer than
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
,
that is
12-15 cm. After that, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
smolt
salmon moving again in an open ocean for five years and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growing
up to adult salmon. The size of adult salmon is the longest one,
that is
70-76 cm. The life cycle of salmon is not
Consider using a past participle here: "stopped".
stop
at this step,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
repeat when the adult salmon spawn the salmon eggs.

Task 2

There are a number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
that require
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who visit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
to pay the entry fee.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
the other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
are discharge of it. In my opinion, charge for admission fee to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitor
has a greater impact to the management, though it
also
has
Possible spelling mistake found.
disanvantages
behind it.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitor
absolutely
will be happy if they are not pay the admission fee,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this money will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum’s
management to maintain the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
object
inside the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
. For an instance is
Possible spelling mistake found.
Lawang
Possible spelling mistake found.
Sewu
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
in Central Java, Semarang. Located in the city center,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Lawang
Possible spelling mistake found.
Sewu
is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
destination for
Possible spelling mistake found.
traveller
from various city of Indonesia. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
is worth to visit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
object
they have. In a Dutch
Possible spelling mistake found.
Collonialism
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
is a train station with a valuable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
object
. To protect and maintain the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum’s
environment, the management charge 10. 000 for each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitor
.
As a result
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
object
has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
quality even they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
from the past and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitor
can learn a lot from it.
In addition
, the better quality and various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
object
will attract the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitor
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
.

On the other hand
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
give free pass for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitor
it will support
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to study about past history in the related
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
without pay anything. For an example, the student in a school can go around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
to learn from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
object
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
. They can compare the theory they learn in school and the fact in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The given diagrams illustrate

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
488 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The given diagrams illustrate