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The given bar chart illustrates the annual number of sales and rentals of movies from a certain store between 2002 and 2011.

The given bar chart illustrates the annual number of sales and rentals of movies from a certain store between 2002 and 2011. KGLrN
The bar chart gives information about the yearly quantity of rentals and sales in various formats of films from 2002 to 2011. It is noticeable the number of rentals and VHS sales experienced a download trend, while DVD sales and Blu-ray sales showed an upward trend throughout the period, DVD sales had some fluctuation and the lowest number contribution was made by Blu-ray sales. The number of DVD-sales was about 50, 000 in 2002, it approximately increased from 100, 000 in 2003 to well over 150, 000 by the end of 2004 and a steady growth during the next three years. On the other hand, in 2002 the number of Blu-ray sales was 0, and remained steady for the next five years, and continued to slightly escalate to the end of the period, reaching around 10, 000 in 2011. However, DVD sales was less than 180, 000 at the final year. For number of rentals was the highest of various format in 2002, begin higher than the number of VHD sales by approximately 100, 000. In contrast, the figure showed a gradual decrease to about 180, 000 in 2003. On the one hand, the number of VHD sales decreased significantly in 2003 and 2005, and experienced 0 from 2006 to 2011. Finally, number of rentals just over 50, 000 in 2011.
The bar chart gives information about the yearly quantity of
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and
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sales
in various formats of films from 2002 to 2011.

It is noticeable the
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number
of
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rentals
and VHS
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sales
experienced a download trend, while DVD
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sales
and Blu-ray
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sales
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showed
an upward trend throughout the period, DVD
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sales
had
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some
fluctuation and the lowest
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number
contribution
was made
by Blu-ray sales.

The
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number
of DVD-sales was about 50, 000 in 2002, it approximately increased from 100, 000 in 2003 to well over 150, 000 by the
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end
of 2004 and a steady growth during the
next
three years.
On the other hand
, in 2002 the
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number
of Blu-ray
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sales
was 0, and remained steady for the
next
five years, and continued to
slightly
escalate to the
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end
of the period, reaching around 10, 000 in 2011.
However
, DVD
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sales
was less than 180, 000 at the final year.

For
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number
of
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rentals
was the highest of various format in 2002,
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begin
higher than the
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number
of VHD
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sales
by approximately 100, 000.
In contrast
, the figure
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showed
a gradual decrease to about 180, 000 in 2003. On the one hand, the
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number
of VHD
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sales
decreased
significantly
in 2003 and 2005, and experienced 0 from 2006 to 2011.
Finally
,
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number
of
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rentals
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just
over 50, 000 in 2011.

IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the annual number of sales and rentals of movies from a certain store between 2002 and 2011.

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