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The diagrt shows how concentrated apple juice is produced.

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The diagram illustrates the phases and apparatus of producing concentrated apple juice from Apple. Overall, it is apparent from the chart that there are a total of 11 stages in this process, commencing with harvesting and selecting pertinent apples and culminating in labeling and sealing for sale. The process initiates with the apples being selected for subsequent process. In the second stage, fresh apples are passed through a receiving belt before sending them for wash and sort. Following that, apples are grindered in apple grinder after which it is poured in a pressing machine. Similarly, cetrifuger helps in the seperation of water from Apple concentration. The seven stage involves the filtration of concentration. After that, concentration is being heated at 80°C in posteurization. Likewise, concentrated apple juice is filled in the bottle before packaging. Finally, the process concludes with the filled bottles being packaged and marketed for sale.
The diagram illustrates the phases and apparatus of producing concentrated
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apple
juice from Apple.

Overall
, it is apparent from the chart that there are a total of 11 stages in this
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process
, commencing with harvesting and selecting pertinent
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apples
and culminating in labeling and sealing for sale.

The
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process
initiates with the
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apples
being selected
for subsequent
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process
. In the second stage, fresh
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apples
are passed
through a receiving belt
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before
sending them for wash and sort. Following that,
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apples
are
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grindered
in
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apple
grinder after which it
is poured
in a pressing machine.

Similarly
,
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cetrifuger
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helps
in the
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seperation
of water from
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Apple
concentration. The seven stage involves the filtration of concentration. After that, concentration is
being heated
at
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80°C
in
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posteurization
.
Likewise
, concentrated
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apple
juice
is filled
in the bottle
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before
packaging.
Finally
, the
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process
concludes with the filled bottles
being packaged
and marketed for sale.

IELTS academic The diagrt shows how concentrated apple juice is produced.

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