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Comparison of medals won by different nations.

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The two graphs shows the number of medals achieved by five different countries in Winter and Summer Olympics respectively. During the winter tournament, each category of medals is evenly distributed among the five nations. Norway has dominated in each ranking of medals crossing the 350 mark with Russia grabbing the least not more than 200. The number of silver medals won by Norway and the United States is almost double than the medals of Russia and Canada. In the category of bronze, Germany, Russia, and Canada had procured only half of the medals by Norway and the United States. The gold medal winners has purely been topped by Norway with Canada having the least. On the other hand at Summer Olympics, the USA had topped the list with their total medals almost three times more than the medals bragged by the Great Britain. France has one-third of medals of Russia. When we compare the bar chart as a whole, we analyze that the France has clearly got the least number of total medals.
The two graphs
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shows
the number of
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achieved by five
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different
countries in Winter and Summer Olympics
respectively
.

During the winter tournament, each category of
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medals
is
evenly
distributed among the five nations. Norway has dominated in each ranking of
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medals
crossing the 350 mark with Russia grabbing the least not more than 200. The number of silver
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medals
won by Norway and the United States is almost
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double
than the
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of Russia and Canada. In the category of bronze, Germany, Russia, and Canada had procured
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only
half of the
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medals
by Norway and the United States. The gold
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medal
winners has
purely
been topped
by Norway with Canada having the least.

On the other hand
at Summer Olympics, the USA had topped the list with their total
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medals
almost three times more than the
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medals
bragged by the Great Britain. France has one-third of
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medals
of Russia. When we compare the bar chart as a whole, we analyze that the France has
clearly
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got
the least number of total
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medals
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IELTS academic Comparison of medals won by different nations.

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  American English
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