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The given diagram reveals information regarding the steps involved in producing smoked fish.

The given diagram reveals information regarding the steps involved in producing smoked fish. 705B5
The given diagram reveals information regarding the steps involved in producing smoked fish. It can be observed that the whole procedure involves 13 distinct steps, beginning with catching fresh fish from the ocean. The last step shows how final products are delivered to retails. At the beginning of the process, salt-water fish are collected before being transported to local ports by ships. This is followed by freezing fish instantly in buckets for the sake of preserving their highest freshness. They are then defrosted to be ready for the next phases. In the preliminary process, main ingredients are cleaned over cold water, after which they are cut open. Once these steps have completed, cleansed fish are dipped in salt water and smoked on the grill. The process continues when smoked fish are frozen again and kept in cold storage prior to finally being packed into trucks and distributed to various selling systems.
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diagram reveals information regarding the
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steps
involved in producing smoked fish.

It can
be observed
that the whole procedure involves 13 distinct
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steps
, beginning with catching fresh fish from the ocean. The last
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step
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shows
how final products
are delivered
to retails.

At the beginning of the process, salt-water fish
are collected
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before
being transported
to local ports by ships. This
is followed
by freezing fish
instantly
in buckets for the sake of preserving their highest freshness. They are then defrosted to be ready for the
next
phases.

In the preliminary process, main ingredients
are cleaned
over
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cold
water, after which they are
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cut
open. Once these
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steps
have completed, cleansed fish
are dipped
in salt water and smoked on the grill. The process continues when smoked fish
are frozen
again and
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kept
in
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cold
storage prior to
finally
being packed
into trucks and distributed to various selling systems.
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IELTS academic The given diagram reveals information regarding the steps involved in producing smoked fish.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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