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The given diagram illustrates the process of which sugar is manufactured from sugar cane.

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The given diagram illustrates the process of which sugar is manufactured from sugar cane. Overall, this production method invloves both traditional and modern aspects. While tradional aspect includes cultivating and harvesting sugar cane crop, modern aspects indulge heavy machinary in harvesting, crusting and extracting final end product. Firstly, looking at the feild work where the fully grown crop, which usually takes 12 to 18 months to grow, is harvested with both manual labour as well as machines. Coming to the industrial part of the process, where sugar cane is crushed using a crusher to extract juice which will further be purified whith the help of limestone filter to remove impurities. Then, this juice is collected in a evaporator with continous heat from the bottom leading to the transformation of juice in to syrup. Then, the sugar crystals are seperated from syrup using a centrifuge which will be futher dried and cooled to get fine sugar.
The
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given
diagram illustrates the process of which
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sugar
is manufactured
from
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sugar
cane.

Overall
, this production method
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invloves
both traditional and modern aspects. While
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tradional
aspect includes cultivating and harvesting
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sugar
cane crop, modern aspects indulge heavy
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machinary
in harvesting, crusting and extracting final
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end
product.

Firstly
, looking at the
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feild
work where the
fully
grown crop, which
usually
takes 12 to 18 months to grow,
is harvested
with both manual
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labour
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as well as
machines.

Coming to the industrial part of the process, where
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sugar
cane
is crushed
using a crusher to extract juice which will
further
be purified
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whith
the
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help
of limestone filter to remove impurities. Then, this juice
is collected
in
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a
evaporator with
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continous
heat from the bottom leading to the transformation of juice in to syrup. Then, the
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sugar
crystals are
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seperated
from syrup using a centrifuge which will be
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futher
dried and cooled to
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get
fine
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sugar
.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates the process of which sugar is manufactured from sugar cane.

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4 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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