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the chart shows the amount of males and females who were overweight in Australia over a 30- year period, starting from 1980.

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The chart illustrates the amount of males and females who were overweight in Australia over a 30- year period, starting from 1980. Overall, it is noted that the proportion of overweight men is higher than that of women. We can also see that both genders increased slightly. Regarding the rate of females, the overweight rate rose steadily from 32% in 1980 to 43% in 1980. In 2000, the figure for the overweight rate increased slightly to 52% and remained at this level in the next 10 years. In terms of males, the overweight rate grew from 40% in 1980 to 57% in 1990. In the next 20 years, the overweight rate of men increased considerably to 61%.
The chart illustrates the amount of males and females who were
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overweight
in Australia over a 30- year period, starting from 1980.

Overall
, it
is noted
that the proportion of
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overweight
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men
is higher than that of women. We can
also
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see
that both genders increased
slightly
.

Regarding the
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rate
of females, the
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overweight
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rate
rose
steadily
from 32% in 1980 to 43% in 1980. In 2000, the figure for the
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overweight
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rate
increased
slightly
to 52% and remained at this level in the
next
10 years.

In terms of males, the
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overweight
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rate
grew from 40% in 1980 to 57% in 1990.
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In
the
next
20 years, the
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overweight
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rate
of
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men
increased
considerably
to 61%.
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IELTS academic the chart shows the amount of males and females who were overweight in Australia over a 30- year period, starting from 1980.

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