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The given diagram illustrates the manufacture process

The given diagram illustrates the manufacture process 9QRK7
The given diagram illustrates the manufacture process that is utilised to production bricks for the building industry. Overall, it is clear that there are primary eight stages in this process, beginning with in the excavation and the process ends with delivery of the mud. At the first step of the process, the mud used to make the bricks is dug from the ground by a large digger. The next step shows, this clay is placed on a piece of metal, which is used to break the clay into small pieces. . Following this, sand and water are added to the mud and this mixture is turned into two different types of bricks by molding or utilizing a wire cutter. In the next stage, they are heated in a drying oven, then at a high temperature (200c to 1300c), then the cooling process is carried out in the chamber for 2 - 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and sended to their destinations.
The
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given
diagram illustrates the manufacture
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process
that is
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utilised
to production
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bricks
for the building industry.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that there are primary eight stages in this
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process
, beginning with in the excavation and the
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process
ends with delivery of the mud.

At the
first
step of the
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process
, the mud
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used
to
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make
the
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bricks
is dug
from the ground by a large digger. The
next
step
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shows
, this clay
is placed
on a piece of metal, which is
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used
to break the clay into
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small
pieces.
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.
Following this, sand and water are
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added
to the mud and this mixture
is turned
into two
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different
types of
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bricks
by molding or
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utilizing
a wire cutter.

In the
next
stage, they
are heated
in a drying oven, then at a high temperature (200c to 1300c), then the cooling
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process
is carried
out in the chamber for
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2 - 3
days.
Finally
, the
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bricks
are packed
and
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sended
to their destinations.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates the manufacture process

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163 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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