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The given column graph illustrates the proportion of british citizens donated money to charity by different age groups for the year 1990 and 2010.

The given column graph illustrates the proportion of british citizens donated money to charity by different age groups for the year 1990 and 2010. YLLy5
The given column graph illustrates the proportion of british citizens donated money to charity by different age groups for the year 1990 and 2010. According to the given information, there are five groups of individuals who gave money. (18-25, 26-35, 36-50, 51-65, >65). The highest amount donated by 36-50 age group in the year 1990. however, in the year 2010 the maximum amount were given by 51-65 age category. To begin with, 18-25 age group gave 15" of donation in the year 1990. Whereas in the year 2010, the percentage of donation decreased and reached at only 5%. The same trend followed by the people of 26-35 and 36-50 age group, as they donate more money in the year 1990 as compared to the year 2010. They gave 30% and 43% amount of money in the year 1990, then the ratio were decreased and touched at 24% and 35% in the year 2010. Secondly, the rest two categories of donors gave the highest proportion of donation in the year 2010 than the year 1990, means their donation were increased by the passing years. There were 35% and 33% of money donated by 51-65 and 65+ age group, then it increased and picked 39% and 35% in the year 2010.
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column graph illustrates the proportion of
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british
citizens donated
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money
to charity by
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different
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age
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groups
for the
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1990 and 2010.

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information, there are five
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groups
of individuals who
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gave
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money
. (18-25, 26-35, 36-50, 51-65, >65). The highest amount donated by 36-50
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age
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group
in the
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year
1990.
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however
, in the
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year
2010 the maximum amount were
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given
by 51-65
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age
category.

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begin
with, 18-25
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age
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group
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gave
15
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of
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donation
in the
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year
1990. Whereas in the
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2010, the percentage of
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donation
decreased and reached at
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only
5%. The same trend followed by the
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people
of 26-35 and 36-50
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age
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group
, as they donate more
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money
in the
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year
1990 as compared to the
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year
2010. They
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gave
30% and 43% amount of
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money
in the
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year
1990, then the ratio
were decreased
and touched at 24% and 35% in the
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year
2010.

Secondly
, the rest two categories of donors
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gave
the highest proportion of
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donation
in the
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year
2010 than the
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year
1990, means their
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donation
were increased
by the passing years. There were 35% and 33% of
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money
donated by 51-65 and 65+
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age
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group
, then it increased and picked 39% and 35% in the
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year
2010.
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IELTS academic The given column graph illustrates the proportion of british citizens donated money to charity by different age groups for the year 1990 and 2010.

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