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The given charts illustrate the number of people, and the birth and death rate in England and Wales from the year 1700 to 2000.

The given charts illustrate the number of people, and the birth and death rate in England and Wales from the year 1700 to 2000. Mlkxa
The given charts illustrate the number of people, and the birth and death rate in England and Wales from the year 1700 to 2000. Overall, in the year 1700, the number of people were very less as compared to other years, after that the population was gradually increased untill 1900, and peaked in the the year 2000, Whereas, the birth rate was the highest in the year 1800. It is clear from the chart that, there were 10 million population in the year 1700, further it was slightly claimed up under 20 millions in the year 1800. From the year 1900 to 2000 it rose from under 40 millions to 50 millions. It can be seen that, the birth rate was suddenly increased from 10 to more than 20 in the year 1800. Moreover, the death rate follow the same route. On the contrary, the death rate was remained low as compared to birth rate in all the given years. From the year 1800, the rates were continuously decreased. Further, the year 2000 had the least number of death which was 10 per 1000 people.
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1700 to 2000.

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2000, Whereas, the
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1900 to 2000 it rose from under 40 millions to 50 millions.

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1800.
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2000 had the least number of death which was 10 per 1000
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IELTS academic The given charts illustrate the number of people, and the birth and death rate in England and Wales from the year 1700 to 2000.

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