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task 1 Sharing Information

task 1 Sharing Information pJmo3
The bar shares the percentage comparison of Australian regular physical activity of different age groups between men and women in 2010. Overall, It can be seen in Bar that almost more and less than 50% in different age groups shows that women do more regular physical activity than men. Most regular physical activity is carried out by women from the age of 25 to over 65 years. Australian Men only get a higher percentage of doing the regular physical activity than women in the age group of 15 to 24 years. Between Men and Women has a gap percentage of 5. 1%, Men get a percentage of 52. 8% while women only 47. 7%. Nevertheless, in the age range of 25 to 65 years and over, the graph shows that women mostly have regular physical activity than men. In fact that Australian women have reached a peak percentage of more than 50% in the age range of 35 to 64 years.
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in 2010.

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do more
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activity
than
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men
. Most
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is carried
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from the
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of 25 to over 65 years.

Australian
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range of 25 to 65 years and over, the graph
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. In fact that Australian
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have reached a peak
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range of 35 to 64 years.
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IELTS academic task 1 Sharing Information

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
161 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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