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The given chart indicates the proportion of immigrants from five distinct countries to Australia in 1962, 1982, and 2002.

The given chart indicates the proportion of immigrants from five distinct countries to Australia in 1962, 1982, and 2002. 26LGx
The given chart indicates the proportion of immigrants from five distinct countries to Australia in 1962, 1982, and 2002. It can be seen that while the rate of immigrants from Vietnam, the UK, and India tended to increase marginally, the opposite was true for Italy and New Zealand in the given period. Also, the most significant proportion of immigrants in Australia was recorded in 1962, and it belonged to Italia. Among the five regions, it can be noted that in 1962, the rate of Australian immigrants from India was the lowest, at 3 percent compared with 10 percent of respondents to both the UK and Vietnam. During the first 20 years, the proportion of Australian immigrants from India showed an upward trend, reached 15 percent in 1982, and then decrease marginally to 14 percent in the final year of the given period. Whereas, before decreased by 5 percent between 1982 and 2002, the rate of Australian immigrants from the UK increased significantly to about 16 percent. Likewise, between 1962 and 1982, the figure for Vietnam rose sharply to 25 percent and then decreased by half in 2002. Out of the other aspects, the percentage of Italian immigrants to Australia starting at 40 percent in the first year, ranking the first among other categories then decreased by half in 1982, consequently declined to 15 percent in the final year. Besides, the figure for people inhabiting Australia comes from New Zealand decreased from nearly 9 percent to 5 percent after a 40-year period.
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chart indicates the proportion of
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immigrants
from five distinct countries to Australia in 1962, 1982, and 2002.

It can be
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seen
that while the rate of
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immigrants
from Vietnam, the UK, and India tended to increase
marginally
, the opposite was true for Italy and New Zealand in the
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given
period.
Also
, the most significant proportion of
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immigrants
in Australia
was recorded
in 1962, and it belonged to
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Italia
.

Among the five regions, it can
be noted
that in 1962, the rate of Australian
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immigrants
from India was the lowest, at 3
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percent
compared with 10
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percent
of respondents to both the UK and Vietnam. During the
first
20 years, the proportion of Australian
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immigrants
from India
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showed
an upward trend, reached 15
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percent
in 1982, and then decrease
marginally
to 14
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percent
in the final
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year
of the
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given
period. Whereas,
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before
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decreased
by 5
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percent
between 1982 and 2002, the rate of Australian
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immigrants
from the UK increased
significantly
to about 16
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percent
.
Likewise
, between 1962 and 1982, the figure for Vietnam rose
sharply
to 25
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percent
and then
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decreased
by half in 2002.

Out of the other aspects, the percentage of Italian
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immigrants
to Australia starting at 40
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percent
in the
first
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year
, ranking the
first
among other categories then
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decreased
by half in 1982,
consequently
declined to 15
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percent
in the final
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year
.
Besides
, the figure for
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people
inhabiting Australia
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comes
from New Zealand
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decreased
from
nearly
9
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percent
to 5
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percent
after a
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40-year
period.
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IELTS academic The given chart indicates the proportion of immigrants from five distinct countries to Australia in 1962, 1982, and 2002.

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