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The given chart illustrates the rate of entertainment time relaxed by genders during the period 2 year between 1998 and 1999.

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The given chart illustrates the rate of entertainment time relaxed by genders during the period 2 year between 1998 and 1999. As can be seen from the chart, the percentage of men unemployed was largest, while this was opposite that of the range of women working full time. Besides, the amount of female unemployment and retirement was highest. The percentage of male was highest in unemployment, at 85. The rate of retirement was nearly 85, which was significantly higher than The amount of men working full time was only 45. The percentage of male working part time and housewives was similar, at 0. Look at the chart details, the percentage of female unemployment and retirement age was close to 80, twice as much as the rate of women working full time and part time. Moreover, The amount of housewives was at 50 only female
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relaxed by genders during the period 2 year between 1998 and 1999.

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from the chart, the
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unemployed was largest, while this was opposite that of the range of women
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.
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of male was highest in unemployment, at 85. The rate of retirement was
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45.
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of male
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and housewives was similar, at 0.

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, the
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of female unemployment and retirement age was close to 80, twice as much as the rate of women
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full
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IELTS academic The given chart illustrates the rate of entertainment time relaxed by genders during the period 2 year between 1998 and 1999.

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