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The first illutrates us electrical appliances various ownership in a country from 1920 to 2019, while the second chart displays us total spending hours on house work in family in a same country between same duration. Overall, according to both charts electrical appliances ownership were high in 2019, while in 1920 the proportion of users were minimum. In a same way people spend more hours in a last decades, when it became so less for 2019. According to the first chart, there were less people who own their electrical appliances. In 1920, there was only refrigerator, the proportion of the user were approximately 10 percent respectively, while the user list rosely increased up to the 90 percent in 1960 and in 1980 the consumers reached to the top and 100 percent remain same for 2019. In the case of, washing machine and vaccum cleaner, the proportion of user started from 40 to 30 percent respectively in 1920. However, vaccum cleaner users slightly increased 40 to 80 percent between 1940 to 1960 respectively, while from 2000 to 2019 in this 20 years vaccum cleaner consumers remain same. The proportion was 100%. After 1920 washing machine users increased 30% for next 60 years, unfortunately washing machine user decreased 5% in 1980 respectively. 70% was remain 2000 to 2019 On the other hand, in 1920 per week a family uses their 50 hours for their house work, while it slightly decreased in 30 hours in 1940, besides it become 20 hours and remain same for 2000. In 2019 only 10 hours was true. The
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us electrical appliances various ownership in a country from 1920 to 2019, while the second chart displays us total spending
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on
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work in family in a same country between same duration.

Overall
, according to both charts electrical
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ownership were high in 2019, while in 1920 the
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proportion
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users
were minimum.
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spend more
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in a last
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, when it became
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less for 2019.

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who
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their electrical appliances. In 1920, there was
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refrigerator, the
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user
were approximately 10
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, while the
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list
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increased up to the 90
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in 1960 and in 1980 the consumers reached to the top and 100
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vaccum
cleaner, the
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started
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cleaner consumers
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same. The
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was 100%. After 1920 washing machine
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increased 30% for
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60 years, unfortunately washing machine
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decreased 5% in 1980
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. 70% was
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2000 to 2019

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their 50
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for their
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work, while it
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in 1940,
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and
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10
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was true. The
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