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The given bar show the use of internet in taiwan by age group between 1998 and 2000

The given bar show the use of internet in taiwan by age group between 1998 and 2000 a71B9
The information about the use of internet in taiwan by different age groups from 1998 ro 2000 is being represents into bar chart. The given data is measured into percentage. As per overview, the maximum percentages of use of internet in taiwan by 16 30 years people. Whereas, the minimum was less than 15 years chidren. To begin with, in 1998, 16 30 years individuals was at peak point in the graph which was just above a 50 %. While, 31 50 years individuals was declined and it was reached at 41%and less than 15 and over 50 years people in 1999 was highest percentage in the graph which was 45 %. Whereas, 31 50 years people was just less 40% and less than 15 and over 50 years both same percentage which was 8%. Furthermore, in 2000 less than 15 and over 50 years people was just less than 10%. While, 16 30 years people was just less than 45% and 31 50 years people was just above a 35%.
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different
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from 1998 ro 2000
is being represents into bar chart. The
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data
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percentage
. As per overview, the maximum
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of
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use
of internet in
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taiwan
by 16 30 years
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people
.
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, the minimum was
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less
than 15 years
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chidren
. To
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begin
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just
above a 50 %. While, 31 50 years individuals
was declined
and it
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at 41%and
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less
than 15 and over 50 years
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people
in 1999 was
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highest
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percentage
in the graph which was 45 %. Whereas, 31 50 years
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people
was
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just
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less
40% and
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less
than 15 and over 50 years both same
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percentage
which was 8%.
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, in 2000
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less
than 15 and over 50 years
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people
was
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just
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less
than 10%. While, 16 30 years
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people
was
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just
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less
than 45% and 31 50 years
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people
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just
above a 35%.
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IELTS academic The given bar show the use of internet in taiwan by age group between 1998 and 2000

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5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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