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The given bar graph illustrates the number of female and male students learning marketing, accounting, finance, economics, engineering and mathematics at a US tertiary in 2010.

The given bar graph illustrates the number of female and male students learning marketing, accounting, finance, economics, engineering and mathematics at a US tertiary in 2010. PMl5E
The given bar graph illustrates the number of female and male students learning marketing, accounting, finance, economics, engineering and mathematics at a US tertiary in 2010. As transparent from the bar chart, it is clear that the students learning finance were the largest while the opposite was true for engineering. The number of 2 genders was the biggest difference in learning mathematics. As can be seen from the graph, female ones chose marketing for approximately 130 people while the number of males accounted for around 70 students. Furthermore, female ones attracted by accounting made up 200 students, followed by the number of male was nearly 160 students. In terms of economics, male ones were double that of females, which was 150 and 70 students, respectively. Looking at the chart specifically, finance experienced an equal number of students in both genders, with 230 students, which was the highest among six main subjects. On the contrary, engineering was the lowest with just over 50 students in the sexes. Eventually, mathematics attracted 200 students in males, which was a fourfold rise compared to the number of females.
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learning marketing, accounting, finance, economics, engineering and mathematics at a US tertiary in 2010.

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learning finance were the largest while the opposite was true for engineering. The
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of 2 genders was the biggest difference in learning mathematics.

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chose
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marketing
for approximately 130
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accounted for around 70
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,
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attracted by accounting made up 200
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, followed by the
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of male was
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. In terms of economics, male
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were double that of
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, which was 150 and 70
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in both genders, with 230
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, which was the highest among six main subjects.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph illustrates the number of female and male students learning marketing, accounting, finance, economics, engineering and mathematics at a US tertiary in 2010.

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