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The graph below shows the overweight men and women in Australia between the year 1980 and 2010

The graph below shows the overweight men and women in Australia between the year 1980 and 2010 0Pj1

The bar chart presents the data regarding obesity among both genders, in Australia over the period of three decades. The data is calibrated in percentage. At fleeting glance, it is explicated that women experience than upward trend throughout the period, except for the last decade. Whereas, male counterpart soared at a increasing rate than the opposite sex but had some descendants towards the end of the period. It is apparent that in the year 1980, the ratio of overweight males was considerably high, at 52% while the females witnessed a proportion of 40%. After a span of ten years, women World yet again outraced by the opposite gender by approximately 10%. Probing further, in 2000, lasses corpulent slightly inclined to 60% and remained the same after 10 years. However, the masculines is accounted for 81% with regard to corpulence, in 2000. Then, the figure dropped moderately by 10 per-cent and settled at 71%.

The bar chart presents the data regarding obesity among both genders, in Australia over the period of three decades. The data is calibrated
 in percentage.

At fleeting glance, it is explicated
 that women experience than upward trend throughout the period, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :with the exception of
except for
 the last decade. Whereas, male counterpart soared at Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
 increasing rate than the opposite sex This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 descendants towards the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the period.

It is apparent that in the year 1980, the ratio of overweight males was considerably
 high, at 52% while the females witnessed a proportion of 40%. After a span of ten years, women World yet
 again outraced by the opposite gender by approximately 10%.

Probing further
, in 2000, lasses corpulent slightly
 inclined to 60% and remained the same after 10 years. However
, the masculines is accounted
 for 81% with regard to corpulence, in 2000. Then, the figure dropped moderately
 by 10 per-cent and settled at 71%. 