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The given bar graph demonstrates the length of communication made by three different call types in the UK between 1995 and 2002. Units are presented in billion minutes.

The given bar graph demonstrates the length of communication made by three different call types in the UK between 1995 and 2002. Units are presented in billion minutes. PkElJ
The given bar graph demonstrates the length of communication made by three different call types in the UK between 1995 and 2002. Units are presented in billion minutes. Overall, it is crystal clear that the citizens of the UK made most of their calls in the local area while contact by mobile phone was the least. Furthermore, the number of minutes spent on international and national calls and mobiles both increased over the period. In 1995, the total number of minutes spent on local calls through fixed line was above 70 billion which was roughly twice greater than that of national and international calls. After that, it witnessed a significant increase and reached a peak at approximately 90 billion in 1999. Then, the time used for local calls decreased steadily to just over 70 billion minutes in 2002. It is also evident that in the period between 1995 and 2002, the length of international and national calls climbed dramatically, from just under 40 billion minutes in 1995 to a peak of just over 60 billion in 2002. In addition, the value for mobile minutes went up rapidly from approximately 3 billion in 1995 to around 45 billion in 2002.
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bar graph demonstrates the length of communication made by three
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call
types in the UK between 1995 and 2002. Units
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billion
minutes.

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, it is crystal
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that the citizens of the UK made most of their
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calls
in the local area while contact by mobile phone was the least.
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, the number of minutes spent on international and national
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calls
and mobiles both increased over the period.

In 1995, the total number of minutes spent on local
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calls
through
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fixed
line was above 70
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billion
which was roughly twice greater than that of national and international
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calls
. After that, it witnessed a significant increase and reached a peak at approximately 90
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billion
in 1999. Then, the time
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used
for local
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calls
decreased
steadily
to
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just
over 70
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billion
minutes in 2002.

It is
also
evident that in the period between 1995 and 2002, the length of international and national
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calls
climbed
dramatically
, from
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just
under 40
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billion
minutes in 1995 to a peak of
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over 60
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billion
in 2002.
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, the value for mobile minutes went up
rapidly
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billion
in 1995 to around 45
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billion
in 2002.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph demonstrates the length of communication made by three different call types in the UK between 1995 and 2002. Units are presented in billion minutes.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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