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The given bar chart represents the proportion of regular physical activities of male and female among six age groups of Australia in 2010.

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The given bar chart represents the proportion of regular physical activities of male and female among six age groups of Australia in 2010. overall women were more dominant in physical exercise than men. The chart displays that there was evidence of a steady boost in the percentage of females who regularly worked out. Here 52. 8% of men from 15 to 24 exercised daily which was nearly 5% higher than women from that age group. However the scenario remained quite opposite in all other age group. Physical activity was more trendy among women in aged 25 to 34( 48. 9%) while the number male is 6% less than the female of the same age group. This dominance of women was more prevalent in age group 35 to 44 where 13% more women did workouts, in 45 to 54 women overshadowed men by 10 % approximately and in 55 to 64 the differences was about 8%. In the age group 65 and over this differences was much less where only 0. 4 % more female did the activity than males
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bar chart represents the proportion of regular physical activities of male and
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among six
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age
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of Australia in 2010.
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overall
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were more dominant in physical exercise than
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men
.

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who
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worked out. Here 52. 8% of
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men
from 15 to 24
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daily which was
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women
from that
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.
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the scenario remained quite opposite in all other
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group.

Physical activity was more trendy among
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women
in aged 25 to 34
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48. 9%) while the number male is 6% less than the
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female
of the same
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age
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group
. This dominance of
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was more prevalent in
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age
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35 to 44 where 13% more
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women
did workouts, in 45 to 54
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women
overshadowed
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by 10 % approximately and in 55 to 64 the differences was about 8%.

In the
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65 and over
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differences was much less where
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0. 4 % more
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female
did the activity than males

IELTS academic The given bar chart represents the proportion of regular physical activities of male and female among six age groups of Australia in 2010.

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