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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the Australian the male and female population participating in some form of physical activity on a regular basis in 2010.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the Australian the male and female population participating in some form of physical activity on a regular basis in 2010. The data is divided into 6 age groups, ranging from 15 to 65 years old and over. The main points of interest are that in the youngest age group (15-24) more men than women take part in regular physical activity. However, this then changes and women do more physical activity than men from 25 to 65, at which point both men and women do almost the same amount of physical activity. Overall, the proportion of men involved in physical activity decreases between the ages of 24 and 44 and then begins to increase again. In the case of women, the trend is reversed, somewhat, with younger women being involved in less physical activity and doing more physical activity between the ages of 25 and 64, before returning to virtually the same level of physical activity as the youngest age group (15-24).
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the Australian the male and female population participating in
some
form of
physical
activity
on a regular basis in 2010. The data
is divided
into 6
age
groups, ranging from 15 to 65 years
old
and over.

The
main points of interest are that in the youngest
age
group (15-24) more
men
than
women
take part
in regular
physical
activity
.
However
, this then
changes
and
women
do more
physical
activity
than
men
from 25 to 65, at which point both
men
and
women
do almost the same amount of
physical
activity.

Overall
, the proportion of
men
involved in
physical
activity
decreases between the
ages
of 24 and 44 and then
begins
to increase again. In the case of
women
, the trend
is reversed
, somewhat, with younger
women
being involved
in less
physical
activity
and doing more
physical
activity
between the
ages
of 25 and 64,
before
returning to
virtually
the same level of
physical
activity
as the youngest
age
group (15-24).
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the Australian the male and female population participating in some form of physical activity on a regular basis in 2010.

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