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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 Ge0x
Two figures compare the percentages of the installed buying deals for distinct market areas in New Zealand In the years 2003 and a decade later. It can be observed that film or music also books witnessed an increased trend meanwhile clothes and travel saw a decreased trend. To begin with the skyrocketing movement for both movies or sound plus the publications with their networked trades. More specifically the sales for the movies or sound soared from 21% in 2003 to 33% in ten years. A similar movement occurred in publications which also escalated from 19% to 22% in 2003. On the other hand with the dwindled pattern with the sales in travel and garments. In 2003 travel was estimated as the ratio of 36% and noticed a declined in 2013 and was roughly 29%. Finally, in 2003 garments sales was calculated as the rate of 24% and saw a fall of pattern in 3, 600 years plus was approximately 16%.
Two figures compare the percentages of the installed buying deals for distinct market areas in New Zealand In the years 2003 and a decade later. It can
be observed
that film or music
also
books witnessed an increased trend meanwhile clothes and travel
saw
a decreased trend.

To
begin
with the skyrocketing movement for both movies or sound plus the publications with their networked trades. More
specifically
the sales for the movies or sound soared from 21% in 2003 to 33% in ten years. A similar movement occurred in publications which
also
escalated from 19% to 22% in 2003.

On the other hand
with the dwindled pattern with the sales in travel and garments. In 2003 travel
was estimated
as the ratio of 36% and noticed a declined in 2013 and was roughly 29%.
Finally
, in 2003 garments sales
was calculated
as the rate of 24% and
saw
a fall of pattern in 3, 600 years plus was approximately 16%.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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