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The given bar chart illustrates the five sports that the adults, boys, girls have engaged in Manchester, England.

The given bar chart illustrates the five sports that the adults, boys, girls have engaged in Manchester, England. A2eL
The given bar chart illustrates the five sports that the adults, boys, girls have engaged in Manchester, England. It is explicitly observed that in the bar chart most of them had taken part in Swimming whereas least had participated in Football. In Adults, the majority of them are interested in Swimming and Tennis and least interested in Hockey and Basketball. However, the highest number of boys (around 70) have been involved in Football. which was the least by adults and girls. In addition, the boys have shown less interest in Hockey among all types of sports. In contrast, the girls favourite sport was Hockey. Almost 60 out of 100 have participated in Hockey whereas the adults were less interested. The girls least favourite sport was Football only 5 of them were involved in it. In short, the boys have the highest portion of involvement in 3 out of 5 sports and adults have the lowest involvement in 4 out of 5 sports.
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that the
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adults
,
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boys
,
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have engaged in Manchester, England.

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explicitly
observed that in the bar chart most of them had taken part in Swimming whereas least had participated in Football.

In
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Adults
, the majority of them
are interested
in Swimming and Tennis and least interested in Hockey and Basketball.
However
, the highest number of
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boys
(around 70) have
been involved
in Football.
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which
was the least by
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adults
and
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girls
.
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, the
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boys
have shown less interest in Hockey among all types of sports.

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, the
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girls
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favourite
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sport
was Hockey. Almost 60 out of 100 have participated in Hockey whereas the
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adults
were less interested. The
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girls
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least
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favourite
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sport
was Football
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only
5 of them
were involved
in it.

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boys
have the highest portion of involvement in 3 out of 5
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sports
and
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adults
have the lowest involvement in 4 out of 5
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sports
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the five sports that the adults, boys, girls have engaged in Manchester, England.

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