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The given bar chart illustrates the female population who went to higher education during a period of 16 years starting in 1980 in different countries namely UK, USA, Autralia, South Korea and France

The given bar chart illustrates the female population who went to higher education during a period of 16 years starting in 1980 in different countries namely UK, USA, Autralia, South Korea and France gbgll
The given bar chart illustrates the female population who went to higher education during a period of 16 years starting in 1980 in different countries namely UK, USA, Autralia, South Korea and France Looking at the bar chart, it is apparent that the propotion of women population who took part in post-graduate program experiences an upward trend. In addition, Australia and USA registered the leading position among all Whereas the survey period witnessed a gradual increase of 15% in the number of female in South Korea who participated in higher education, there was a period of stability at around two-third in the the number of Australian women who continued to took part in post-graduate programes. Additionally, the quantity of women graduates who took part in higher education in Australia was as many as that in USA in 2015 at 59%. Following USA were UK and France at 55%. Turning to 1980, standing at the second position was France with 50%, which was followed by USA and UK at 39% and 35% correspondingly. Outstandingly, Australia was approximately fourfold South Korea, which was the last rank among all.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the female population who went to higher education during a period of 16 years starting in 1980 in different countries namely UK, USA, Autralia, South Korea and France

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