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The given bar chart depicts the proportion of Australian man and woman who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010.

The given bar chart depicts the proportion of Australian man and woman who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010. KldK9

The given bar chart depicts the proportion of Australian man and woman who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010. As a general trend, the percentage of women who did regular exercise was higher than men in all age groups, expect in case of the youngest age group. As is presented in the chart, 47. 7 percent of female at the same age took regularly exercise involvement then went up steadily with increasing age, reaching its peak in the 45 to 54 age group, at 53. 3 %, then dropping gradually and reached only 47. 1 in the highest age group exercising regularly. Male participation was higher in the 15 to 24 age group, at 52. 8 percent, than in only others. However during the year physically activism man followed the moderately decrease to its lowest level among 35 to 44 year-olds, at 39. 5 percent, before climbing to 46. 7% among the over 65s. This rate was very close to that of females in the same age bracket.

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