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The given bar chart depicts the amount of imported tea and coffee

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The two pie charts depict the proportion of electric usage in ten various fields in the East of Australia between 2007 and 2010. Units are measured by percentage. Overall, it can be apparently seen that the percentage of electric usage in residence completely dominated the remaining sectors. While the usages of electricity in agriculture and transportation was the lowest percentages in two different periods. Another striking intriguing of this chart is that residence, commerce, mining, agriculture, and transportation are these sectors, which remained stable the percentage of electric usage. To begin with, in 2007, residential electricity registered 28% compared to 23% of commercial electric usage. In terms of Transportation, it stood at only 1%, which witnessed a relative similar number with agriculture. Moreover, the proportion of electricity in mining was not as higher as aluminium, which 9% and 13% respectively. Regarding electric usage of other metals, it recorded at 12%, which was lower than 1% the percentage of manufacturing. In 2010, according to transportation, residential, commercial, agriculture, and mining electric usages, these sectors underwent a remain unchanged trend. Otherwise, electricity usage of aluminium witnessed a slight reduction to 11%, which was higher than the percentage of manufacturing, at 9%. In addition, the proportion of electric usage of other metals increased moderately to 18%.
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in ten various fields in the East of Australia between 2007 and 2010. Units
are measured
by percentage.

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that the
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electric
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in residence completely dominated the remaining sectors. While the
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usages
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electricity
in
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agriculture
and
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transportation
was the lowest
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in two
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periods. Another striking intriguing of this chart is that residence, commerce, mining,
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, and
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are these sectors, which remained stable the
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usage.

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registered 28% compared to 23% of commercial
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. In terms of
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, it stood at
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in mining was not as
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. Regarding
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of other metals, it recorded at 12%, which was lower than 1% the
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, these sectors underwent
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of manufacturing, at 9%.
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of other metals increased
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to 18%.
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