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The chart shows participation rates for different lockdown activities in the city of saigon during 2020

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The bar graph gives information about the participation rates for different lockdown activities in the city of Saigon during 2020 It is evident that self-study is the kind of activity that the percentage of males and females is at least. In addition to this, the participation activities rates of males were higher than that of females Regarding reading books, the percentage of males joined in this about 73%, which was remarkably higher than that of females, about 8%. Similarly, a total of 70% males took part in cooking while the percentage of females was significantly lower, about 10%. Exercising in males was 75% and in females was only 15%. However, in terms of investing, both were equal With regard to watching TV, about 60% of females participated in this, fourfolding the figure for males, at only 15%. A number of people who participated in self-study were the lowest. To be specific, the percentage of females in this was about 20%, whereas that of males was about 11%
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