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The garph shows illustrates the number of banabas imported to 4 countries in 1996 to 2004

The garph shows illustrates the number of banabas imported to 4 countries in 1996 to 2004 GMmyQ
The line graph illusterates how many bananas which were imported to four countries namily: Japan, France, German and USA, over a decade between 1996 and 2004. Units are measured in KG In general, what stands out from the graph is that, there were a considerable upward trends in the imported for bananas of both German and Japan, while France and USA saw a fluctuation and also remained stable over the period in question. Looking at the details, if we look at German and Japan, it started to araound 1. 5 in 1996, and then it hit a peak and leveled off over the next three years, at which point it rose steadily to around 2. 0 in 2002, next, there were significant decrease in the imported bananas, finishing to around 1. 7 at the end of the periond. Regarding Japan, the trend was simila, ot intiated 2. 0 in the first year, at which point there was then a gradual rise in the imported zone at around 2. 5 in the firs half of the decade. Subsequently, it flactuated and then leveled off to around 2. 0 in 2004. By contrast, with respect to France and USA, the trend started 2. 0 and then it rose slightly to around 2. 1 untill it remained stable in the last two yeras. As for USA, the last imported country was USA, following this the United States began the period importing 1 U per KG of bananas and the number fluctuated with a narrow range, finishing at 1. 2 in 2004.
The line graph
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how
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bananas which were
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imported
to four countries
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namily
:
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Japan
, France, German and USA, over a decade between 1996 and 2004. Units
are measured
in
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KG


In general
, what stands out from the graph is that, there were a considerable upward trends in the
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imported
for bananas of both German and
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Japan
, while France and USA
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saw
a fluctuation and
also
remained stable over the period in question.

Looking at the
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details
, if we look at German and
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Japan
, it
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started
to
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araound
1. 5 in 1996, and then it hit a peak and leveled off over the
next
three years, at which point it rose
steadily
to
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around
2. 0 in 2002,
next
, there were significant decrease in the
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imported
bananas, finishing to
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around
1. 7 at the
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end
of the
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periond
. Regarding
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Japan
, the trend was
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simila
,
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ot
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intiated
2. 0 in the
first
year, at which point there was then a gradual rise in the
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imported
zone at
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around
2. 5 in the firs half of the decade.
Subsequently
, it
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flactuated
and then leveled off to
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around
2. 0 in 2004.

By contrast, with respect to France and USA, the trend
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started
2. 0 and then it rose
slightly
to
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around
2. 1
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untill
it remained stable in the last two
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yeras
. As
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, the last
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imported
country was USA, following this the United States began the period importing 1 U per KG of bananas and the number fluctuated with a narrow range, finishing at 1. 2 in 2004.
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