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The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes made.

The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes made. DPGp
The given maps illustrate the changes an Australian park has undergone. There are a few things that remained unchanged and some new things have been introduced in the park. The first map depicts the park in the past. A cycle path ran just south of the ocean. The park was divided into two sections by a path. The right side of the park had a cafe towards the northwest corner. There was a soccer field in the middle of the park and a few trees were there in the park. The left section of the park had only a few trees. Towards the south of the park, there was a road named Park Avenue. There have been some changes, which can be seen in the park now. The cycle path has remained unchanged. The park still has two sections, but there are many changes that can be seen in the park. The soccer field is in the same location. The cafe has been moved a little southwards. A tennis court has been made towards the south of the soccer fields. In the left section of the park, a few benches have been setup in the northeast part and an area for barbecue has been made in the southeast section of the park. Overall, it can be said that some additions have been made to the park to make the park more attractive for people to visit.
The
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given
maps illustrate the
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changes
an Australian
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park
has undergone. There are a few things that remained unchanged and
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some
new things have
been introduced
in the park.

The
first
map depicts the
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park
in the past. A cycle path ran
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just
south of the ocean. The
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park
was divided
into two
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sections
by a path. The right side of the
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park
had a
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cafe
towards the northwest corner. There was a soccer field in the middle of the
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park
and a few trees were there in the
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park
. The
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left
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section
of the
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park
had
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only
a few trees. Towards the south of
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the


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park
, there was a road named
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Park
Avenue.

There have been
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some
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changes
, which can be
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seen
in the
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park
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now
. The cycle path has remained unchanged. The
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park
still
has two
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sections
,
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but
there are
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many
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changes
that can be
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seen
in the
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park
.
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The
soccer field is in the same location.
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The
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cafe
has been
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moved
a
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little
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southwards
. A tennis court has
been made
towards the south of the soccer fields. In the
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left


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section
of the
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park
, a few benches have
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been setup
in the northeast part and an area for barbecue has
been made
in the southeast
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section
of the park.

Overall
, it can
be said
that
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some
additions have
been made
to the
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park
to
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make
the
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park
more attractive for
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people
to visit.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes made.

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
236 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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